Never shall I let go of my Trust
Could it be Could it be
from far and wide have i sailed
the glissering night shaded blowing
yet had not blown away my trust
night had came and my shining knight in armor was rusty
the flowers so alive yet much like plastic
time was a concern
I opened my eyes flipping my pages
like my eyes and flowers everything felt dry
i had grown to pitiness
the books i have so paved thrown away effortlessly
just for my trust
have you came sooner I wouldn't have lost my trust
speaker is Dr Gauchet Vincent
audience is Dr Gauchet Vincent's love
Message is that time can make you question about many things such as trust
Peer edited by Connor Gallager
"there are no errors, good job Ali, nice poem but try not to extend it."
This is nicely done. The use of repetition in the first line opens the poem in a dramatic way. Question- why did you choose to punctuate the poem the way you did?
ReplyDeleteOver all, good work.